考研英語寫作點評

時間：2024-06-27 00:41:00 學人智庫

考研英語寫作點評

　　寫作，是考研英語的“重頭戲”，正如我們所知道的一樣，它的重要性不言而喻。可是，一直以來，我們都是在以文字的形式去闡述“要怎樣做，不要怎樣做”，太過枯燥。今天，文都英語老師將以學生寫的作文作為范例，以生動形象的方式告訴大家，我們到底該如何把握大作文。我們先看下下面這篇范文。

考研英語寫作點評

　　范文：

　　The bar chart above demonstrates clearly and logically that some obvious changes have taken place in terms of different car brands in China's market. In accordance to the figures in the diagram, one can observe that the percentage of Chinese cars has witnessed an evident rise ,while the percentage of Janpanese cars has been on a considerable drop. Sprecifically speaking ,the percentage of Chinese cars increased from 25percent in 2008 to almost 35 percent in 2009.

　　Such tendency mirrored by the graph can be attributed to a number of factors, but the following two may carry more conviention. One factor is that the economy has developed rapidly in recent years, and therefore there would be more money avaliable for cars. Another factor is that the evolution in the field of Chinese science and techology directly contributes to such phenomenon reflected by the graph.

　　Take what has been analyed into consideratiPn, we may saftely draw a conclusion: the current trend is positive and therefore acceptable. And I am firmly certain that this trend will continve in the years to come.

　　點評：

　　整篇文章179詞，符合考研英語二大作文的寫作要求。一般來說，比題目要求的多出20詞左右的作文是最佳的，最好不要剛好壓著題目要求的最低字數。而且，這位同學在句子的開頭空出了四個字符也很好，這一點和中文中的空出兩個漢字有所區別。但是，這篇作文也不可避免的存在一些問題：

　　⑴單詞拼寫問題

　　第一段第四行Sprecifically應為specifically; 第三段第一句中analyed應為analyzed, consideratiPn 應該是consideration.

　　⑵語法問題

　　①may carry more conviention表達不準確，應該改成may carry more attention;

　　②Take what has been analyed into consideratiPn,這句話有問題，這個句子中有兩個動詞Take和has been analyed, has been analyed在what引導的從句中，只能是what從句的謂語動詞，那take應該是句子的謂語動詞吧，可是句子沒有主語，再往后看我們會發現“we may saftely draw a conclusion”主謂賓齊全，是個結構完整的句子，這樣一來前面就只是分詞作狀語了，表示主動，那就應該用現在分詞Taking.所以這句話就可以改成：

　　Taking what has been analyzed into account, we may saftely draw a conclusion that the current trend is positive and therefore acceptable.

　　③可能有許多同學會覺得第二段的理由闡述部分自己分析的不是很對，寫的不太好，文都英語老師告訴大家，其實沒關系。因為，對于同一問題，不同的人肯定“仁者見仁，智者見智”，只要能夠自圓其說、令人信服就可以了;

　　④總的來說，這篇文章寫的還行。如果能夠把第一段少寫點，中間論述充分點，最好能做到“兩頭小，中間大”，那就更好了。

　　作文和其他部分不同，只有多寫多練才能找到問題所在。文都英語老師希望小伙伴們平時多多訓練，相信有志者最終能夠夢想成真!

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